by Ane Mulligan @AneMulligan
Today I'm excited to have another guest on The Write Conversation. Ane Mulligan is one of my favorite new authors to watch, as well as a dear friend and president of Novel Rocket. Be sure to leave a comment below welcoming her. Everyone who leaves a comment will be entered in a drawing as well!
The Magic Paragraph
The Magic Paragraph was the brainchild of the late great Ron
Benrey. I sat in a class Ron taught at the Blue Ridge Mountains Christian
Writers Conference a number of years ago. That was, for me a benchmark in my
writing career. I’ve been given permission to carry on teaching it by his
widow, Janet Benrey. For more of Ron’s witty delivery of writer advice, do
yourself a huge favor and buy his book The Complete Idiot’s Guide to WritingChristian Fiction.
So, what is the Magic Paragraph? It goes like this:
- Signal whose head to enter.
- Twang an appropriate sense or start a thought process.
- Show appropriate action or reaction (what the character experienced).
- Start the character thinking.
Repeat
as often as needed.
Here's an example from my
debut novel:
Claire hung her
tote on the stairs newel post. From the looks of the set table and the
appetizing aroma permeating the house, the girls had been home for some time.
She wondered what they'd fixed. It didn't really matter, of course. Twin-cooked
anything was her favorite. They definitely inherited Joel's culinary talents.
1. In this paragraph, Claire
is whose head we’re entering. She’s the POV character in this scene.
2. The next sentence twanged two senses, sight “from the
looks of the set table” and smell “and the aroma permeating the house” and it
started her thought process, wondering what they cooked.
3. Next is something Claire has experienced: “Twin-cooked
anything was her favorite.”
4. She starts thinking how they have inherited their daddy’s
culinary talents.
Here’s one more. See if you can pick out the Parts from the
Magic Paragraph:
Patsy gave the
fluffy duvet a final tug then aligned her and Nathan's pillows. The bed
appeared department-store-perfect—nothing out of place. Beneath the top cover,
the sheets hadn't been changed, but from the outside, all looked ideal. Hiding
imperfections seemed to be the story of her life.
If you’re having problems
keeping the reader turning pages, try this technique. Definitely start each scene
with a Magic Paragraph, and then repeat as necessary.
Don't forget to give the magic paragraph a try, leave your answers (along with any questions) in the comments section below!
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TWEETABLES
While a large, floppy straw hat is
her favorite, Ane has worn many different ones: hairdresser, legislative
affairs director (that's a fancy name for a lobbyist), drama director,
playwright, humor columnist, and novelist. Her lifetime experience provides a
plethora of fodder for her Southern-fried fiction (try saying that three times
fast). She firmly believes coffee and chocolate are two of the four major food
groups. President of the award-winning literary site, Novel Rocket, Ane resides
in Suwanee, GA, with her artist husband, her chef son, and two dogs of Biblical
proportion. You can find Ane on her Southern-fried
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With a friend like
Claire, you need a gurney, a mop, and a guardian angel.
Everybody in the small town of Chapel Springs, Georgia,
knows best friends Claire and Patsy. It's impossible not to, what with Claire's
zany antics and Patsy's self-appointed mission to keep her friend out of
trouble. And trouble abounds. Chapel Springs has grown dilapidated and the
tourist trade has slackened. With their livelihoods threatened, they join
forces to revitalize the town. No one could have guessed the real issue needing
restoration is their marriages.
Edie, thanks for letting me share here. The Magic Paragraph is a wonderful legacy Ron left us and I love to share it. Gina Holmes, Jessica Dotta, and I always incorporate it.
ReplyDeleteAnd, Edie, we're doing a giveaway on The Write Conversation today. :)
ReplyDeleteAne, thanks for the insights. I'll apply these helpful nuggets to my WIP for children.
ReplyDeleteYou're so welcome, Sally! I promise you it works! And you're entered in the drawing.
DeleteGreat advice, Ane. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteYou're welcome, Andrea. It truly is good advice. It made a huge change in my writing back then and I still employ it. :) And you're entered int he drawing.
DeleteThanks so much for the great study on opening paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteAnd it's not just opening. Sometimes, mid scene we need to ground the reader again. You're entered in the drawing.
DeleteGreat tip, thanks for sharing! And--welcome!!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Tammy! I always love to share the really great tips I've received. You're entered in the drawing.
ReplyDeleteThis is great advice Ane - one of those simple, yet profound tidbits ;-) Thanks!
ReplyDeleteOh, and you're entered, too! :)
DeleteThank you, Nan. They really are profound, aren't they? Thanks for stopping by.
ReplyDeleteRon's advice was spot on! And so easy to understand once you hear it. To think he was an engineer, yet could teach us how to focus on the senses so well! We will miss him.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing Ane!
It sure was, Mary! And you're welcome.
DeleteAne, I like the magic paragraph, and I love the example you used. Right now there's a sweet aroma of bread pudding in our home, since my teen daughter made it today.
ReplyDeleteBlessings ~ Wendy ❀
Thanks, Wendy. And can I run over to your house? I love bread pudding!! :o)
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing the Magic Paragraph concept with us. It's one of those things that makes you say, "Why didn't I come up with that?" Blessings on your journey to teach these principles to others.
ReplyDeleteI know, Cathy! I wish I'd come up with it, but I get to carry it on for Ron. Thank you so much!
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