Active verbs and specific nouns
bring the article/story to life
FICTION:
Not: The scent
was fresh and new like a flower after the rain.
Instead: The
fresh scent hung in the air like a late blooming rose after the rain.
NON-FICTION:
Not: It’s hard
on feet.
Instead: It’s
not abrasive on bare feet.
Not: It looks
good in any room.
Instead: It
looks equally well in a metal loft or a room with exposed wooden beams.
