Edie here: I'm super excited to have my dear friend and writing-coach-extraordinaire, Susan May Warren guest posting today. I begged her to come for two reasons: 1. because she always has such incredible information to share about novel writing and 2. because she has a new novella collection available for preorder and I wanted to help spread the word. So be sure and take a look at the offer for Somewhere, My Love at the end of the post!
Build powerful TURNING POINTS in a novel (An Equation!)
by Susan May Warren @SusanMayWarren
Build powerful TURNING POINTS in a novel (An Equation!)
by Susan May Warren @SusanMayWarren
For most authors,
setting up the right Act 1 feels natural—you introduce a character, give him
a problem, invite him on a journey and then . . .
All the fun
starts. But what do you DO during the party? You can’t simply throw up
obstacles, because obstacles do not create tension. Great tension is
created by a sympathetic character who wants something for a good reason, who
has something to lose, so they create a goal which is then met with a realistic
and overwhelming obstacle.
It’s the push
against this obstacle that causes tension.
More, it’s the
AFTERMATH of confronting that obstacle that causes that character change. And
that, after all, is the goal of your story—to create a powerful character
change.
But what kind of
obstacles are worthy of your story?
The best
obstacles are external devices that cause an internal dilemma. And it’s this
combination of Obstacles + Internal Dilemma that are the TURNING POINTS in your
novel.
I got sucked into Last
of the Mohicans last night (can it truly be that that film is 22 years
old?). Great character change, great external obstacles leading to
internal change.
Meet
Hawkeye. He’s a white man adopted into the Mohican tribe, wanting nothing
to do with the war, or the military, or rules, for that matter. His
external goal—to have a family (he is unmarried), but also to stay a free
indian warrior. His values are loyalty (to his family) and freedom. (remember this.) However, Hawkeye’s big flaw is that he doesn’t want to get
involved, he wants nothing to rule him.
Hawkeye and his
party (his father and brother) happen upon a British garrison who have been
attacked by a Huron war party. Hawkeye helps save the women, and agrees
to help them get to Fort William Henry.
This decision is
bolstered by the presence of Cora, the pretty daughter of Colonel Munroe. Cora is different than the other “white” women—she seems to understand
Hawkeye and he begins to fall for her.
Enter the Turning
Points.
A great Turning
Point contains the combination of an External Obstacle that leads to an
Internal Confrontation (usually the battle between two values) and results in a
Change of Character.
Let’s take those
Turning Points apart.
First, start with
the External Obstacle. A great ExO always stands in the way of the
External Goal. Hawkeye’s short term goal is to get Cora and her sister to
Fort William Henry (and back to their father.)
His long term
External Goal is to keep Cora alive.
The result of
confronting the External Goal is the effect it has on Hawkeye’s values—Freedom
and Loyalty. With each step, he gains one and loses another.
Let’s take a
look.
The first Turning
Point (after the Inciting Incident) occurs when they come across the destroyed
homestead of a friend. Hawkeye knows that a war party has committed the
violence, and refuses to bury the bodies, lest they return and discover
Hawkeye’s trail. His goal—keep Cora alive by hiding their presence. The
obstacle—she wants to bury the dead. The conflict—she doesn’t trust him.
He wants to keep his word to her that he’ll get her to the Fort safely,
so he tells her a story about himself (in MBT—My Book Therapy—we’d call that the Dark Moment
Story—note that it happens in Act 2A!) which makes her respond in a way
that strengthens the bond between them.
However, with
this step, he’s compromised, just a little, his freedom. He’s starting to
get involved.
External Obstacle
causes Internal Confrontation, which leads to a Change of Character.
The second
Turning Point happens when they reach the fort. There, the Colonel is
informed of the attacks on the homesteaders—many of whom are the wives and
children of his militia. He refuses to let them leave to protect them, so
Hawkeye engineers their escape from the fort. . . an act of sedition. However, instead of leaving with them, he decides to stay.
Why? Because:
- Jack Winthrop: You’re not coming with us?
- Hawkeye: I’ve got a reason to stay.
- Jack Winthrop: That reason wear a striped skirt and work in the surgery?
- Hawkeye: It does. No offense, but it’s a better looking reason than you, Jack Winthrop.
More, the FRENCH
are digging in and are going to overrun the fort, and he knows it.
Let’s return to
our equation:
Goal—To keep Cora
Alive. External Obstacle—His crime of sedition and the need to escape
before he’s discovered. Internal Confrontation—freedom versus loyalty. He again
chooses loyalty (which is morphing into love) and that choice puts him in
Cora’s arms. . . and then in prison.
Note how while
the obstacles increase in danger, it’s the effect of the decision as a result
of the obstacles that worsens Hawkeye’s situation. Authors often confuse making
the obstacle worse when actually the worsening OUTCOME, or the EFFECT of the
obstacle is the goal.
The Final Turning Point happens when, after the fort falls and the British surrender, the
escaping troops are ambushed by the Huron and Hawkeye and Cora (and friends)
flee their attackers. They find themselves trapped in a waterfall and Hawkeye
must face his final External Obstacle—stay, and fight to the death and lose his
chance to keep Cora alive. Or flee, and hope that he can rescue
her. Remember, those External Obstacles always block the character from
his main goal. (Keep Cora Alive!) He then has an Internal Confrontation,
choosing between loyalty and freedom, again. This time, although it looks like
he’s choosing freedom, he’s actually choosing to rescue her.
Cora Munro:
You’ve done everything you can do. Save yourself. If the worst happens, and
only one of us survives, something of the other does too.
Hawkeye: No. You
stay alive. If they don’t kill you, they’ll take you north, up
to Huron land. Submit, do you hear? You’re strong, you survive. You stay alive,
no matter what occurs! I will find you. No matter how long it
takes, no matter how far, I will find you! (Most romantic dialogue in
history. Next to – “it wasn’t over! It still isn’t over!”)
He is choosing to
save her by escaping—and then racing to free her. But the character change here
is that he binds himself to the task of rescuing her. He’s no longer free and
is now completely involved in this war, in saving her. He’s gone from
uninvolved hunter, answering to no one, to warrior, answering to the call of
his heart.
The Black Moment,
of course, is up next, when he tries to trade himself for the woman he loves,
sacrificing his freedom, and life for love.
How do you make
your Act 2 compelling? In MBT, we rely on a book by Brandilyn Collins, Getting into Character, where she talks about the D’s—building your story around
creating a series of increasing disappointments—Disaster, Destruction,
Devastation. We affectionately call them the D’s. But you can simplify—Bad,
Badder, Baddest. Or whatever you want to call them—just make sure that each
Turning Point contains the following:
An External
Obstacle that is set against the main Goal (Keep Cora Alive),
+
which causes an
Internal Confrontation (between values),
+
and results in a
Character Change (even if it is a small step).
Not every
obstacle is a turning point. Not every value choice is a character
change. But the lethal combination of the External Obstacles combined with the
Internal Confrontation can make even the most hard-hearted, leather-clad,
long-hair warriors (with incredible brown eyes) sacrifice themselves for the
sake of love.
Edie again: if you want to see how this all works together, order Susan's new novella collection, Somewhere, My Love. Beyond the fact that it's only 99 cents—You'll be drawn into the story, but you'll also see examples of exactly what Susan shared in the post above.
by Susan May Warren
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Susan May Warren
is the RITA award-winning novelist of over thirty novels. A five-time Christy
award finalist, a two-time RITA Finalist, she’s also a multi-winner of the
Inspirational Readers Choice award, and the ACFW Carol Award.
A seasoned
women’s events speaker, she’s a popular writing teacher at conferences around
the nation and the author of the beginning writer’s workbook: From the
Inside-Out: discover, create and publish the novel in you!.
She is also the
founder of www.MyBookTherapy.com, a
story-crafting service that helps authors discover their voice. You can find
her online at www.susanmaywarren.com.
This is great! But I need to work on getting different examples. I never watched that movie. lol
ReplyDeleteI always learn so much from Susie! Thank you for sharing this, Edie!
ReplyDeleteBlessings,
MaryAnn
Susan, this is JUST what I needed to hear. Thanks so much. I tweeted it for others to enjoy. Looking forward to seeing you at BRMCWC next week! Blessings,
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