by Cindy Sproles @CindyDevoted
Adverbs like actually, literally, basically, soon began to weigh down my
work. These words do nothing for your sentence other than add to the word
count and lessen the strength of the sentence.
Follow these tips to strengthen your writing legs . . . and toss
the crutches:
3. Learn and accept there
are always better words.
Keep a teachable spirit and never marry your words. There is always room for
improvement. Always a better description or a clearer sentence.
Writing is a process. One
that requires continued study. Throw out the crutches and grasp hold of the
determination to push through. You'll be glad you did.
What have you done to toss out your writing crutches? Be sure to leave your thoughts in the comments section below.
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I buggered up my knee. It wasn't one of my more graceful moments
and of all things, I let the competitive side of me win. "Let Grace have
the chair. You don't need to win the game."
But noooo! I made a dash for sole surviving chair. It was
between Grace and me . . . Grace won. Me, well, I caught my boot on the carpet,
sailed into the air, and landed like a half-ton of bricks on my knees. Short
version: torn ligament, broken patella. Yep, I needed crutches. I declined them
and decided to push through, and find better ways to walk and strengthen my
knee.
Early in my writing career, I had writing crutches . . . words that, though they sounded really spiffy,
were a lazy form of writing. I needed to push past them to improve. They were
words that sounded well placed but as time and experience taught, proved to
make my writing stilted and wordy. I learned not to write to impress, rather
write to improve.
Don't let adverbs weigh down your writing. |
Actually, she should have never gone with Joe to the market, can be improved by saying what is
important. She shouldn't have gone
with Joe to the market. A vast improvement in sentence value -
yes?
Literally is a word we tend to use figuratively. Which,
by the way is an adverb used correctly.
I literally jumped out of my skin.
The truth is - I have yet to leave my skin crumbled in
a pile on the floor where I literally, jumped out. I jumped out of my skin.
These pesky LY words do have a purpose, but we sometimes allow
them to be the catch all or the crutch that prevents us from stretching
our writing wings and developing our ability to write descriptively. There is a time
and a place for these adverbs. Study and learn when and how to use them to your
benefit rather than your demise.
1. Sentences like:
Basically, I can guide them down without written directions.
Actually, she traveled alone.
However, I must seek other opinion.
Actually, she traveled alone.
However, I must seek other opinion.
Are stronger without the adverb.
I can guide them without written
directions.
She traveled alone.
I must seek other opinion.
She traveled alone.
I must seek other opinion.
2. Practice your writing
skills. Dig deeper for
a stronger, more descriptive way to write.
Go from this:
Fiercely, the pot lid shook as the water inside rose to a boil. Sweet memories gingerly floated in her mind of her momma. The water bubbled violently, popping onto her skin and burning her. Maddie closed her eyes, intentionally taking in a long breath and holding the scent of coffee in her lungs. Expectantly, bad memories seeped in from the past. Memories of a simpler time. Memories when things were better.
Fiercely, the pot lid shook as the water inside rose to a boil. Sweet memories gingerly floated in her mind of her momma. The water bubbled violently, popping onto her skin and burning her. Maddie closed her eyes, intentionally taking in a long breath and holding the scent of coffee in her lungs. Expectantly, bad memories seeped in from the past. Memories of a simpler time. Memories when things were better.
To this:
The lid of a brass pot popped up and down. Coffee bubbled and
spit around its edges. Pictures of her mother slaving over a hot stove flashed
through her mind. Splatters of hot liquid tingled against her skin. Maddie
closed her eyes, tilted her nose upward, and took in a slow, intentional
breath. Her lungs filled with the scent of coffee. Her mouth filled with saliva,
and the bittersweet smell dragged back memories of a time past. A time
when life was simple. A time when . . .
well, a better time.
4. Practice, practice,
practice self-editing.
Spend time sharpening these skills and you'll be astounded at the improvement
in your writing.
What have you done to toss out your writing crutches? Be sure to leave your thoughts in the comments section below.
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Cindy Sproles is an author and popular speaker. She is the cofounder of Christian Devotions ministries and managing editor of Straight Street Books and SonRise Devotionals, imprints of Lighthouse Publishing of the Carolinas. Cindy is the executive editor of www.christiandevotions.us and www.inspireafire.com. She teaches at writers conferences nationwide and directs The Asheville Christian Writers Conference - Writers Boot Camp.
She is the author of two devotionals, He Said, She Said - Learning to Live aLife of Passion and New Sheets - Thirty Days to Refine You into theWoman You Can Be. Cindy's debut fiction novel, Mercy's Rain, is available at major retailers. Visit Cindy at www.cindysproles.com and book her for your next conference or ladies retreat. Also connect with her on Facebook and Twitter.
Thank you so much for this. As a new writer this has given me much to chew on. I use the word "actually" too much. I have introduced my sister to this blog. She has been writing for years.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Cindy. Great advice.
ReplyDeleteCindy! Yeowch! A broken patella is bad! I researched it for my sophomore novel and I decided my character did NOT break hers. You poor thing. I broke my thumb once during dress rehearsal for a show. Another character and I dove over a sofa. I'd done the stunt several times, but that night I miscalculated things and broke my thumb. I guess I'm not as young as I used to be. lol
ReplyDeleteI used these words a lot way back when. Now I know better and find these words stick out like a sore thumb when I see them in books. The word THAT has the same effect on me.
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