Wednesday, December 4, 2013

The Key to Writing Good Fiction—Put Your Reader to Sleep

by Edie Melson

Yes, you read the title correctly. Put your reader to sleep

Okay, maybe not completely to sleep, but at least allow them to dream. What does dreaming have to do with writing? Everything. The dream I’m referring to is the fictional dream. If you’ve never heard the term before, don’t worry. I guarantee you know what I’m talking about. I think author, John Gardner says it best. 

“What counts in conventional fiction must be the vividness and continuity of the fictional dream the words set off in the reader’s mind.”

A fictional dream occurs when the world in the story you’re reading becomes more real than the physical world around you. We’ve all be there at one time or another—transported into another time or another place by an author’s well crafted words.

This experience is one that we try to create for our readers. And it’s one of the biggest differences between a good book and a great one. So how do we create this dream world? We do it by paying attention. Notice where you are right now. Are there sounds? Smells? Even if you’re not overwhelmed by your setting I bet you’re aware of it. The same thing is true for our characters. If we've written them as three dimensional people then they should notice and be affected by what's around them. However, if we neglect those details, we deny our readers the chance to be transported.

Even more important than what we do to put our readers to sleep is what we DON’T do. I think writers are far more often guilty of waking a reader up. We, as the author, have an obligation to not jolt our readers out of their fictional dream world. 

So what are some things we do that interrupt pleasant dreams?
  • Bad Grammar—I’m not talking about a missed comma or two. I’m referring to sentence structure that’s difficult to read, modifiers that modify the wrong thing or even complicated punctuation. All of these things can cause a reader to stop and ponder what you’re trying to say. Once they stop you’ve lost them, they’re awake.
  • Confusing Dialogue—This can include things like long sections of dialogue with no speaker tags or beats. If the reader has to go back and figure out who’s speaking it means you’ve either not put in enough tags or your characters don’t have unique enough voices to be identified. One word of caution, overuse of ‘said’ instead of interspersing with speaker beats can be just as jarring.
  • Creative Speaker Tags—Anytime you use a speaker tag other than said or maybe asked you run the risk of making your reader stop. The word said is so common place in literature that it’s almost invisible. The reader skims lightly over it, uninterrupted. If, on the other hand, you pull out your thesaurus and try to find other words to use in its place you end up with jarring prose that tells the story through speaker tags instead of dialogue.
  • Characters who don’t act right—I’m not referring to moral actions. We’ve all read stories where a character does something and we find ourselves shaking our heads. Know your characters well enough to keep them from acting out of character.
  • Overwriting a dialect—I’m not against allowing your character to speak with an accent or in a dialect, but be careful how you do it. When the character is first introduced you can use a heavier hand with the spellings that denote dialect, such as learnin’ instead of learning. But after the reader gets to know the character they can hear the character speaking in their head and you don’t have to use spelling to convey their voice. In fact, if the reader has to work too hard to decipher your intent they will never even make it into the fictional dream.
  • Head Hopping—This is when you switch POV (point of view) from one character to another without a good reason. The rule of thumb is that each scene should have a single POV character and that should be the character with the most at stake.

The storyteller who can invite the reader into his world and make him believe it's real has captured the essence of what it means to be a great writer.

Now it's your turn. What jolts you out of the story world when you're reading?

And, don't forget to join the conversation!
Blessings,

Edie

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13 comments:

  1. I'm guessing this applies to non-fiction too, with trying to put the reader in the scene, doesn't it?

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    1. Ellen, it absolutely does. Anytime you're telling a story these things help engage the reader. Blessings, E

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  2. As an editor, you've pretty much hit the nail on the head. I get the heebie geebies with major POV problems. (Shiver) And, the use of attribution after attribution with no action beats - Argh! An easy fix for many writers is to read your chapter out loud. I do this with my own writing. This allows me to hear the annoying said said said said .... Then, I fix it.
    Great post as always, Edie.

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    1. Paula, reading aloud is a definite must! We engage different pathways in the brain when we read out loud as opposed to saying the words in our minds. Personally, I never let anything go out unless I've read it aloud. Thanks for stopping by and sharing that tip! Blessings, E

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  3. Great post, Edie. Thanks for sharing.

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    1. Cindy, thanks so much for stopping by! Blessings, E

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  4. Thank you, Edie! Most helpful and to he point. Gave me something to think about..info I needed.
    Margie Houmes

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    1. Margie, I'm glad the info was helpful. Thanks so much, Blessings, E

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  5. When a simple fact is incorrect. One of my favorite mystery writers, in an otherwise great book, referred to the "battleships" in San Diego harbor. It was set in current day. Maybe it's because I was a sailor, but it jolted me right out of the story. Unless it's 1945, there won't be in battleships in San Diego (even the recent, and short-lived, reactivated battleships were gone by then). I got over it eventually. Still might write him a nasty letter.

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    1. Ron, that's a GREAT point. I once read a thriller by a NY Times Best-seller and she referred to the mountains overlooking Houston (Texas). There are no mountains within a hundred miles of that city. I had to put the book down, never did finish it. Thanks so much for sharing, Blessings, E

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  6. Thanks, Edie, for an excellent post.

    I get jolted when a writer is heavy-handed with technical stuff. One book had so much computer jargon that I skipped over a whole section. It might as well have been written in Chinese.

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